ValerieFaller wrote:
Aw, thanks! I've been addicted to Gravity Falls.
I haven't written anything about Frozen, but a friend of mine plans to. ^.^
Hm, lemme see, where's that one that really could work on its own?
Aha, here it is!
It's sweet on the surface and darker beneath
This place is dangerous, why don't you see?
Heed the warnings given, don't dare to delve in
The questions you're asking, the answers are grim
No such thing as an angel in hell, now you're on your own
Do you really think that you could make it alone?
No true victory arises, only temporary peace
Will we ever find the haven that we seek?
No happy ending yet to speak of in this dark fairytale
Of demons and dreams and an angel in hell
Personally, it's not my favorite, but I do like the last two lines for some reason. ^.^
Oh I haven't seen Gravity Falls, I'll have to look it up. That is really good! Yeah that's an ABCB rhyme structure, you write very similarly to me actually
umm here's that sonnet I wrote, I grow to dislike it more each day and it needs a re-draft but here it is, if I remember it correctly.
Life runs it's unpredicted course to soon,
Your ticket bares a new stamp everyday,
A flower picked before it's time to bloom,
The patient hunter time will catch it's prey.
The ticking countdown cannot be reset,
And it's precise digits are uncertain,
My only hope is that we don't forget,
That life can close quickly, like a curtain.
Forgotten? Only time can tell that tale,
Existing in the mind, no shadows cast,
It's crude and wistful ticking will prevail,
It whispers where it breaths of distant past.
So love, don't live in gluttony of time,
Pass on the gifted gift which is so fine.
That's it, each line had to be 10 syllables (iambic pentameter), with 14 lines, consisting of three quatrains with an A,B,A,B rhyme scheme which tell of a problem, with the rhyming couplet at the end which gives a resolution to the problem. Give it a go, it's rather fun