a poem written by me: the dark haze

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This is entirely fictional. its a poem about insanity, loss, love and depression.

THE DARK HAZE


it falls on me like a blanket of torment, crushing my twisted, distorted soul. Gagging on my soul, my essence, it seeps out of me. Madness surrounds me, not knowing whats real. I am alone in this stricken world. I want to escape, but theres no way out. unknowing of the perils that haunt me, the dark thoughts haunting my mind.

Reality and fantisy i cannot divide, insanity following me, haunting me.
Each day is like a dagger through my heart, living without you...

I pine for you, my sweet angel, i cant be sane without you, i cry, blame everyone around me, but deep inside, i know those words hurt you.

i made a mistake, i was blind to whom i desired: you. I was worshiping a false goddess, the one i didn't want

now my soul burns, my heart is broken but it still beats, How could i have caused such hurt?

I have lost my mind over the two cruel words i used: its over

I liked it, but there were some spelling/grammar type errors. No big deal, though.

I voted "Yes". *smile*

I prefer the shorter verse type poetry, but that's my personal taste. I liked it and voted "yes" as well.

I liked at lot actually. But I don't think a poem about insanity can ever truely be: entirely fictional. Analysing insanity with an open mind will leave a mark on your soul, only by not feeling anything can you protect yourself from insanity, and from your poem, I would say that you do feel.

The story of loss is fictional, the feelings are real. Therefor I like it a lot, lies to tell the truth.