katy_rome wrote:
http://www.dos-and-donts-autism.com/autism-causes.html
I just wrote this article on the causes of autism. Interested to hear people's thoughts on it.
Wow that's so cool that you are this passionate about it. This whole website is beautiful and so professional. I'm impressed that you wrote a book given that you work, it looks like, as a full time nanny. I worked as a full time nanny for many years and it didn't leave me much time to even be a student, so my hat is really off to you for tackling such an unwieldy project as writing and publishing a book, and even for the level of professionalism you reached on your website.
I'm going to be honest about your article: I think it needs some work. Here's the thing: it reads like people are already on board with you. What I mean is that you don't lead the reader to understand your point of view by presenting a logically valid argument, you just start right out with assertions that may or may not be true.
For instance, I haven't heard of anyone being called autistic due to having genetic markers for autism. However, your very first sentence is that "we could describe people as autistic ... when they have a genetic predisposition towards autism." I don't think that we could describe people that way, I just don't think that's how it's done. My understanding is that the diagnostic process for autism is about observation and evaluation -- that there are traits with statistical inference to a higher probability of autism, but that prior to rigorous, and lengthy testing and, in fact, prior to a person reaching a particular age (at least here in California) an autism label is withheld.
In another example, the traits you singled out to describe common traits of autism are neither necessary nor sufficient for autism, so that's another point where I don't see your logic and thus don't 'buy in' to your argument. It looks like this is meant to be a persuasive essay so that point of not buying in to me is an important reader experience to reflect back to you. I'm definitely NOT trying to discount your work or intelligence, though. Please know that I don't at all mean to insult or demean you but instead to offer feedback in case it is useful.
I think that for it to be persuasive you need to focus more on stating objective facts that lead to logical conclusions.
That said, I'm autistic, so I read things differently than normal people.