"My School Day Routine" By Kipo Lamron

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Like I said, BIG!!

Obligatory *bump* for Starr.

Oh, I guess I may as well say that Kipo was inspired by Chris from Curious Incident. That's where I got the do not instead of don't thing.

I know exactly what you mean. This is a very interesting way of describing things, and I‘m glad you want to try it out, but are you sure it wouldn‘t turn out too confusing? Having several differing perspectives can be very tricky even with third-person narration - it tends to make the writing chaotic, since the narrative is broken down into separate fragments, which are normally very hard to combine into a coherent whole. If you‘ve read „To the Lighthouse“, for example, you‘ve probably noticed how disjointed it seems because the perspective keeps switching all the time, and one neither sees everything that‘s going on through the eyes of one single person, nor does one get an objective picture of it (this is one of the few things I dislike about Virginia Woolf); that, with third-person narration. First-person narration would have amplified the fragmentariness many times over.

In the story we are working on right now, I and my co-author initially wanted to have two interchanging perspectives, those of a mother and her young son, but had to abandon the idea because even this was enough to disrupt the unity of the narrative.

Besides, first-person narration always has a element of bias to it, regardless of how impartial this particular character could be. Third person, on the other hand, gives an impression of objectivity and a certain distance which usually makes descriptions more balanced.

But, whichever approach you decide to take – good luck!



Have you considered giving a „twist“ to the report to make it in some way unusual? Otherwise there seems to be no real point in including a regular school report, which is like many others written by children every day, just for the sake of it. I don‘t think it‘s right to put anything into a work of fiction simply because one decided to do so - there has to be some special significance to it which would make it indispensable to the narrative. Showing someone's writing style also doesn't seem to be enough of a reason, provided there is no special content.

I did something of the sort when I had one character (HFA/ADD and a very messy, exuberant guy, much like myself) steer his wildlife observation report toward a serious ecological problem, and another piece of writing where he had to describe a painting – toward the subject of being a „square peg in a round hole“ and never fitting in, partly because he was deliberately bending the rules, partly because he simply failed to grasp what was required from him. The only reason why I decided to include these two reports was, they were a handy way to show that he is, on one hand, absolutely obsessed with ecological issues, and, on the other, is acutely aware of standing out and not being like the others.

But then, of course, this could be rather out of character for Kipo, since, unlike my Bertrand, she isn‘t a regular rule-breaker and doesn't tend to get "carried away".



It didn‘t sound *that* unusual to me. If I were you, I‘d make it more „literary“-sounding – I'd make the sentences longer and more complex, or include some sophisticated words which one would never hear in colloquial speech, and would normally expect to find only in some classic literary work. Then it would really stand out.

But again, this is just me.

Good luck once more!

Thanks for that. I would have to note once again that it's just an English report. It's not supposed to have any significance at all, it's just a report Kipo had to write one day. It in no way has any contribution to the main story, apart from showing Kipo's way of thinking without actually having to read the story itself.

One the perspective-switching thing, the 'book' first starts out with switching perspective's each chapter, usually on an important one for the next part of the story being told. At the start it cycles through all the characters so you get used to their thinking style and such, and then it goes into the 'best for the moment' format for each chapter.

Well I think this is an excellent story and please keep up the good work KBABZ.

BTW, I've broken a few hair brushes trying to get knots out of my hair.

Good story!

Thanks guys! Good to hear that breaking hair comb thing is a real problem, not just something the Mythbusters would, well, Bust.

I think Kipo's different style is shown well in relation to how others see her, which tells something about them. They bully, ridcule, are confused, or sense something different, and then react in a protective, questioning, or try to reach out, like connecting with someone who speaks another language.

Kipo herself thinks more than she speaks, and has drawn a blank from the world when speaking her thoughts. Not connected, but still in the world. Minimal and rehersed answers, but only when properly asked, when they can not be ignores, Kipo, must start every interaction. They stop as soon as possible.

Kipo understands her role of being a ref, even when they use an improper form. She could also protect the group from saber tooth tigers, anything that links her to the group without being involved. Kipo is nowhere she wants to be, which would be alone in her room playing with magnets, so all choices are the lesser of many evils. There are things worse than waterfalls.

She does understand the others, but to her they lack a reality. Some are of value, that would save her from an air horn meltdown. They do the right thing, but at the generator there is no connection. There is an acceptance, without an understanding. Most of what they do is meaningless to her. Her goal is to avoid being yelled at. She does just enough to live, get through school, and is pleased to have a group to hide in.

Kipo's thoughts quickly sort what is close, which she will most likely ignore. When she thinks to herself, she gets farther from the world, and she is on the far edge to start with. She does not dare to follow and express her thoughts, and stops them with her dayol cube, and math. Both are within the reality she can not see, but must live in.

She must fit somewhere, but all of her self started tries have failed, so she only responds, and then in the least. She has perceptions in advance of her years, bumped up a grade and still bored. She has perceptions in advance of her species. She is one, in a world where others are a part of many.

Kipo needs to meet some other one, she would feel good in a horse pasture, horses have a unity of being. Like Lisa Simpson having a crush on Nelson, the first boy she kisses. They were about as far apart as possible, but both were fully a one, that did not relate to the socially fractured. Each overcomes it in their own way.

Only in math can Kipo give the right answer, and she never fails, up to 476. It is obvious that the patterns formed after that bring back bad memories. Compared to her school mates, Kipo is very old within, having thought all the thoughts up to 476 x 476. Numbers are only a way of counting something.

Kipo can only function with things that fit her inturnal order. That which fits what she knows can be filed and remembered, that which can not be understood, is ignored. She needs to meet someone as plain and truthful as herself. Someone could share in what both find to be true, without being a Kipo clone.

Mind is the same in all species. they have range and values, ways in which they use it, but thought is universal. I look forward to more of Kipo's observations. She could speak books in a sentence.

Aww, thanks for that Inventor! You spoke more about Kipo than I did!

Well, sorry KBABZ, I did read your story before I went on holiday but when I saw the long and thoughtful replies from the others in this thread it put me off posting, because mine will be so short, lol. But I did want to post as I enjoyed the story very much. I found that I became quite involved in what happened to Kipo, certainly enough to keep reading and I do hope you will keep writing as I think you have a talent for story-telling.

I look forward to reading the next instalment of Kipo's adventures very soon.

Wow, you must live in a very unique place, KBABZ!