Help with a speech please. (DUE Monday)

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Since this is the most active board here I thought I could place my topic here I hope it isn't of too much concern. My speech is a Eulogy on Hans Asperger. It's supposed to be in the present tense as if I'm there at his funeral not biographical or on his whole life or that his namesake was the basis of the name Asperger's etc. What I need is the following 1) mention his specialty in Autism somewhere towards the beggining to introduce to my audience WHO Hans Asperger was. 2) My connection to this man.

Both need to be more towards the beggining of the speech and I'm drawing a blank so I thought to ask fellow Aspies here. Here is my speech:

I feel Hans Asperger was a great man, he believed "Not everything
That steps out of line, and thus 'abnormal', must necessarily be ,inferior'. - Hans Asperger (1938) he dealt with many children who he labeled as something called 'Autistic Psychopathy' and, his observations of these children was fascinating. One of the children had great technical knowledge to which they learned by endless questioning and there own observations. He observed hundreds of boys and he called them "little professors" because of there ability to talk about there favorite subject in great detail. Sadly he opened a school to help children with this condition but sadly most of his early data was lost in a fire. But why do I stand here speaking of this man because I am like those children he studied and yet i'm a woman which Hans never looked into. I hope someday in the future people will look back on who just Hans asperger's was and his data will mean something!! Maybe one day!! !! It was he who said the following:
"It seems that for success in science and art," he wrote, "a dash of autism is essential."


Thanks fellow Aspies. I would of gotten help from the college writing center but they were booked!! ! Oh well. Thanks!

sign,Brandy

how I would word it (you did not say how long it needs to be):

Hans Asperger was a great man. He believed "Not everything
that steps out of line, and thus 'abnormal', must necessarily be inferior."
Hans Asperger born in 1938 (?) dealt with many children who he labeled as 'Autistic Psychopathy'. His observations of these children was fascinating. One of the children had great technical knowledge to which they learned by endless questioning and their own observations. He observed hundreds of boys whom he called "little professors" because of their ability to talk about their favorite subject in great detail.
He opened a school to help children with this condition but sadly most of his early data was lost in a fire. But why do I stand here speaking of this man? I am like those children he studied, and yet I am a woman which Hans never studied women with this condition.
I hope someday in the future people will look back on who Hans Asperger's was and hopefully his data will mean something!! Maybe one day!! !! It was he who said the following:
"It seems that for success in science and art, a dash of autism is essential."
Rest in Peace Hans, for there are people in this world who will continue to study and learn how essential those with Autism are to a healthy society.


I hope I have not over stepped your boundaries.
You did not say if this was for college or High School. Either way, please pay attention in English classes, don't get too 'wordy', learn the difference between there and their. It may not seem important but these are differences employers will look at in your future.

"Hans Asperger born in 1938 (?)..."

Yay, question mark! Couldn't have been born in 1938: that would have made him six years old when he was working with those kids! My birth year was 1944, so it does stick out in my memory (not that I remember my birth, but I know the year well.)

No I was citing the quote which was from 1938. I have to cite things. He wasn't born then.

I would reword Sufi's thus (otherwise, looks good to me):


Hans Asperger was a great man. He believed "Not everything that steps out of line, and thus is 'abnormal', must necessarily be inferior." Hans Asperger, working during World War II, when Hitler's final solution to the "inferior" was to execute them, dealt with boys whom he labeled as having 'Autistic Psychopathy'. His observations of these children were fascinating. Some of the children had great technical knowledge, which they learned by endless questioning and their own observations. He observed boys whom he called "little professors" because of their ability to talk about their favorite subject in great detail. He opened a school to help children with this condition but sadly most of his early data was lost in a fire. But why do I stand here speaking of this man? I am like those children he studied, and yet I am a woman, while Hans never studied women with this condition.

I hope someday in the future people will look back on who Hans Asperger's was and hopefully his data will mean something!! Maybe one day!! !! It was he who said the following: "It seems that for success in science and art, a dash of autism is essential."

Rest in Peace Hans, for there are people in this world who will continue to study and learn how essential those with Autism are to a healthy society.

Hans Asperger was a great man. He believed "Not everything that steps out of line, and thus 'abnormal', must necessarily be inferior' (Hans Asperger (1938)). He dealt with many children whom he labeled with something called 'Autistic Psychopathy,' and his observations of these children were fascinating. One of the children had great technical knowledge to which he learned by endless questioning and his own observations. He observed hundreds of boys, and he called them "little professors" because of their ability to talk about their favorite subjects in great detail. He opened a school to help children with this condition but sadly most of his early data was lost in a fire. But why do I stand here speaking of this man because I am like those children he studied and yet I'm a woman which Hans never looked into (This doesn't make much sense. Unless you say, "The reason Asperger's work is so pretinent to my situation is that I, in fact, have the disorder named after him," you're just leaving us hanging). I hope someday in the future people will look back on who Hans Asperger was and, then, his data will mean something! It was he who said the following:
"It seems that for success in science and art," he wrote, "a dash of autism is essential."

Fixed the spelling and grammar and took out some things that were not necessary and just, honestly, made it look immature. Made a note about a part that I don't follow you on. As an aside, NEVER say, "I feel..." in professional writing. Ever. For that matter, don't say, "I think," either. Just say what you want to say, straightforwardly.

Are you supposed to memorize/read your speech, or are you supposed to do it extemporaneously? I'm in a public speaking class in college, and that's an important issue; if you're supposed to read it, I reccomend making it very eloquent like those people suggested--if you're supposed to do it extemporaneously, I think you should put your speech into bullet points on note cards. Either way, you should rehearse it to see how long it takes.

Since it's to be spoken in the present tense and you're to state your connection to him, I conclude that the euylogy is supposed to be somewhat fictionalized (since he's deceased for some time now).

So when you state:

You're missing one of the criteria of the assignment.

Euolgies are never given by people who never knew the deseased. So for this assignment you will need to first place yourself into his life. And then speak about him as if he died two days ago.

Example:
It's an honor to be able to tell who my Uncle Hans was to me. If not for him, I would be unable to be in University today. As many of you know, my mother is the cook at his school for autistic boys. Having lost my own father 18 years ago, Uncle Hans provided mother with a livelyhood and was for me the father figure I needed.
Uncle Hans believed; not everything that steps out of line, and thus 'abnormal', must necessarily be inferior. His unconditional acceptance of me in all my childhood quirks is the bedrock of any confidence I now have as a young woman. He called me his Little Entomologist because of my encyclopedic knowledge of bees.
Once when I was ten I had spirited 30 bumble bees, five potted roses in bloom and an ant farm without ants into my room. I was expecting that the bees would form a hive in the ant farm so that I could see what their underground hives look like. When Uncle Hans discovered this he said, for success in science a dash of autism is essential............................

The point here is to include any information about Hans Asperger in your eulogy as if it is something you received directly, live, in your (ficticional) relationship with him.