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02 Feb 2010, 4:26 pm

Think of it sounding like a Three Days Grace type song (That kind of feel)...I could probably sing it and put it on of how it sounds but it would just be lyrics and me horrible humming of what the guitar sounds like...hope you like it

"Mystery"

I'm lost in this sea of humanity
Cold and dark
I'm to blind to see
Why nothing ever turns out right for me
Why things aren't what they seem to be
I'm lost in this world can you help find me

And no one understands me
I'm left alone to fend for myself
Sick and tired of waiting
For someone to figure me out

My vision is blurry
I can not see
The light at the end of the tunnel
The future doesn't look bright for me
Still I'm left to struggle
I'm lost in this world can you help find me

And no one understands me
I'm left alone to fend for myself
Sick and tired of waiting
For someone to figure me out

In this world so cold and dark
I fail to see what brings me apart
Hard to see why no one gets me
I must be a mystery

Dreams of a better day
When life feels so fulfilling
Will it ever change
I want to find a way

Losing the faith in me
When someday will come for me
I'm lost in this world
Can you help find me

And no one understands me
I'm left alone to fend for myself
Sick and tired of waiting
For someone to figure me out

In this world so cold and dark
I fail to see what brings me apart
Hard to see why no one gets me
I must be a mystery

I must be a mystery
Hard to see why no one gets me
I must be a mystery



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06 Feb 2010, 10:57 pm

anybody wanna give a comment, suggestion, opinion?



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06 Feb 2010, 11:48 pm

^i'd love to hear it sung by britney spears

just kidding =P
nice (:

WPers are a little bit shy when it comes to writing/poetry (:
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08 Feb 2010, 10:57 am

JP88 wrote:
Think of it sounding like a Three Days Grace type song (That kind of feel)...I could probably sing it and put it on of how it sounds but it would just be lyrics and me horrible humming of what the guitar sounds like...hope you like it

"Mystery"

I'm lost in this sea of humanity
Cold and dark
I'm to blind to see
Why nothing ever turns out right for me
Why things aren't what they seem to be
I'm lost in this world can you help find me

And no one understands me
I'm left alone to fend for myself
Sick and tired of waiting
For someone to figure me out

My vision is blurry
I can not see
The light at the end of the tunnel
The future doesn't look bright for me
Still I'm left to struggle
I'm lost in this world can you help find me

And no one understands me
I'm left alone to fend for myself
Sick and tired of waiting
For someone to figure me out

In this world so cold and dark
I fail to see what brings me apart
Hard to see why no one gets me
I must be a mystery

Dreams of a better day
When life feels so fulfilling
Will it ever change
I want to find a way

Losing the faith in me
When someday will come for me
I'm lost in this world
Can you help find me

And no one understands me
I'm left alone to fend for myself
Sick and tired of waiting
For someone to figure me out

In this world so cold and dark
I fail to see what brings me apart
Hard to see why no one gets me
I must be a mystery

I must be a mystery
Hard to see why no one gets me
I must be a mystery


That's pretty good.

It sounds like the narrator is just waiting for someone to come along and give him what he wants. Ultimately the narrator will have to grow and learn to take things for himself if he ever wants to be happy.



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09 Feb 2010, 12:03 am

RICKY5 wrote:
It sounds like the narrator is just waiting for someone to come along and give him what he wants. Ultimately the narrator will have to grow and learn to take things for himself if he ever wants to be happy.


Exactly, except you forgot about the part where I actually try hard and don't get rewarded...I know you can't just sit around and expect something to happen but I need help on what my next step is, a lot of help I may stress