Poetry - Need your help!

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Hi guys! I need your help! Of the 9 poems on my site, which do you like best? I'm entering the Flatmancrooked poetry contest!

http://autisticpoet.com/poetry.php

Thanks!! !

WOW! Where do I start to comment. You are a wonderful poet. PLEASE keep on writing. Your style and imagery is really good. But ... unless you have something against punctuation, I would respectfully suggest that you add some periods, commas and semi-colons. It would help the readability tremendously.

Your work reminded me of some other poetry that I love. Do a search for an old out of print book, THE I IN YOU, by Darlene Bridge. Some of her poetry is on-line too I think. She now goes by the name of Darlene Bridge Lofgren and has a website: http://www.angelfire.com/film/storyland/index.html

The words few are more than
Many fraught with withers
Of the dogg'd rhymers dirge.
When passing with pities,
Mince it with mirth and wit,
So that one who reads can
Reason and thole in cry'ng
jeers of joy and courage.

Thanks Aspiewolf! I will definitely take up your advice on punctuation!