my fear of the future, through poetry...

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i started a topic here earlier about how i was scared of the way things could turn out for me, at school yesterday i wrote a poem about this deep and dormant... (for lack of a better word) phobia of mine, tell me what you think, not just a rating please, an opinion, too:

THE FUTURE


in my brain
there is alot.
files of memories,
files of thought.

for each idea,
there is a door.
of which each day,
i open more and more.

but every day,
i dread and dread.
the day i open,
the door of red.

the door that lacks
a cozy room
of which a theory
will always loom.

the door that hides
a hallway, new.
the doors in there,
are futures, soon.

i smile each day,
for the door is locked,
but every day,
closer, i walk.

every day,
i yell at me
the reason is:
i kept the key

but now i see
why it stays
if it didn't
there would be no future days.

the reason the door
is what i hate,
is because something there
holds my fate.


it doesn't show my fear directly, but it came pretty close. the last stanza isn't true, what i hate that is behind those future doors in the hallway behind the door of red, is that some of the future doors may not hold a good thing. i took an artistic lisence of myself...

EDIT: question, should i submit this poem to the writing and poetry?

What I really think is that you are a poet. Also I think that your poem expresses extremely well something that could be expressed in no other way.

YES you should put your poem in the Art, Writing, and Music Forum. (I'm not a moderator but it certainly looks to me like your poem belongs there!)

Also would you like to join us in this WP thread -

Aspie Authors Writing Social Interaction
http://tinyurl.com/yl6jfa

Back to your poem - why is the door red? I was surprised, because the red in your avatar is so stunningly beautiful - I'm surprised that you have a negative connotation for red?

Brilliant poem, like with many, you have to read through several times to get the full meaning, which is how poems should be I think. The connotations used are good in my opinion, along with a fitting rhythm!

origonally, there was going to be another stanza after the first one, but i decided not to include it, here's what it was:

like an office,
with no escape
yet a haven
of hope and faith.

but i felt i was copying the blue man group in the first and 2nd line, they made these sets of music videos for the HOW TO BE A MEGASTAR 2.0 tour. where it makes the corperate world look like a huge in- escapable maze of offices. and i was afraid of being sued big time, for no apparent reason. but i took it out...