Beautiful Poem! You must read it!

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01 Apr 2007, 6:46 pm

When waking up, she keeps the night.
Soaked into her dark, dark hair.
Moonlight shining from her face.
Cool, misty auras in the air.

Her groggy eyes show us the tire,
Preserving starry dark 'til dawn.
Then last night is thrown away,
When she puts her day clothes on.

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What do you guys think? ^w^

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01 Apr 2007, 7:34 pm

It's very nice; the imagery especially is a good touch. And you rhyme! (I can't rhyme to save my life. )

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01 Apr 2007, 8:04 pm

How lovely!

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07 Apr 2007, 1:34 pm

Very lovely!
I can't write a poem!

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07 Apr 2007, 7:55 pm

Wow....its beautiful! I loved the imagery...it reminded me of the moon... la luna...

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