i think i wrote a song that will win a girls heart

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well as i said i will write my own song so i have so ye
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hey are you there?
are you listening?
well i hear voices, and i tell you what they say,

life is just so hard i try to get by,
but its so hard with what happens to me.
and when i see you it helps me get by.
but its so hard when i get so shy again.

i may not be a prophet like jesus,
but i am a gentleman well i try to be.
i imagine a world where i can be who i want to be.

i dream of a world where im not judged!, and im not shy!,
and that i can feel this groveing and this moveing!,
whats all the feeling inside is loveing!, wooooo ye

well i sure know all i want is you,
im not needy but i do need you.
well you want to know why i like you,
well i have got to say.

your words are so soothing!, it makes my heart groveing!,
my heart starts danceing!, i feel so happy keep soothing!,
did you beat me at lanceing!, cause you struck me and i fell in love!,

your just like a lovely dove,
im usually careful but i think cupid got me,
i just want to impress you cause you got me,

and now I get light as a feather,
perhaps its the butterflies trying to fly me away,
will you catch me if I started to fly?
I wanna stay on my feet with you.

the world may not be beautiful,
but if the world was beautiful,
you would be the creator,
cause your so beautiful.

i may not be a prophet like jesus,
but i am a gentleman well i try to be.
i imagine a world where i can be who i want to be.

I dream of a world where they listen!, and I can speak!,
and that some one would notice that I care!, and there is no more hate in this world!,

but this will not happen but if I can,
if I can be with you that's all I need all I want,
do you understand that I care so much,
we all go through trials or so I believe this way,
the trials through life can be hell and heaven,
but who am I to judge this life,
if I was to give you my gift will you keep it safe?
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the way its sung is hard to explain bassically a lot of changes in tone pitch volume and speed. i wonder if i could add more to it and no it is not plagarised unless i can plagarise myself

Wow, that's lovely. I liked the line about feeling like a feather and the butterflies.

I don't know if you should say you hear voices. that might be a little scary.

I can't say whether the one you adore will like this or not, but I fell in love with a song writer once. One of his songs really hit a chord with me and I think that song writing is a really good way to express how you feel and get words out that are otherwise hard to say.

Although, I once wrote someone a song, and he didn't realise it was about him. He said he liked it. He's getting married to someone else later in the year. So songs don't always get you love.

It's a good song but it won't win you love.