Critique my OK Cupid Proilfe Round 2

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Okay I did a bunch of revisions to my profile based on the feedback I received, mainly to be more personal and have better photos (as much as I loathe my weird dorky face).

Any thoughts or further suggestions would really help me.

My OKCupid Profile

I would mention more things about what sort of personality I have.

I thought I did do that. What's missing? It doesn't come through where I say what people notice about me, or in the activities I do?

I can see that you are reserved, care about your health, and you are seriously into film production and photography, but all kinds of people can be into film production and photography. Maybe it's just me. I think I like profiles to be more detailed than other people do. But, just for examples...I can't tell if you like your environments busy or quiet, whether you are a homebody or like to go out (not just for work, but to hang out), go with the flow or like to be in control, are laid back or rigid, an individualist or more community-minded, strongly political or don't care...stuff about your personality that lets people know how you interact with the world.

pis are a lot better although your face looks crooked in the second pic. OI also think you need to heed others' advice of taking your pants lower. The hairstyle in the first pic works the best for you.

I didn't bother reading your profile as that doesnt really matter...your profile text was good enough during critique one imo.

Seems it's impossible to please everyone. Some people say to keep he profile short and sweet as to not look desperate, while others say they like detailsssssssssssssss.

I'm afraid of giving too many details, that it'll scare people off. I mean, I make a good faith effort to be open minded about people, even if they have different religious beliefs or political, or they're outgoing, while I'm more introverted...shouldn't they hold off judging me? I wish everyone was just interested in meeting new people, and getting to know one another, and instead everyone seems invested in types and people that will fulfill some absurd dream.

As for my face, I've said I loathe how I look, and I despise having pictures taken of me. I think if I have any value it's what's on the inside, and not my wretched exterior. So I don't know what I can do to help change how I was born...ugly.

As for clothes...heck I don't know. It's what I...like to wear? Does fashion really matter that much to people? I guess it does. I should be more aware of that, but I guess part of me hoped that people leave high school behind, and become less judgmental about such things. I don't know.

But I'll keep improving the profile. I'll make it perfect. I'll change whatever I can about myself. Whatever it takes to convince someone out there I'm worthy.

Big improvement! No more ambiguous pictures...

I didn't read it all, my head hurts too much right now. Looks good though!

Do you send messages to women (or men) at all?

Having a decent profile is great, but I find as men we have to go out and message people. Women get so many messages per day that I find they rarely have time to seek out and message a guy themselves.

You don't say?

Clearly despite everyone's advice you're determined to do this, so I'll help you as best I can.

I feel like that "a Frieda to my Diego, an Alma to my Alfred, a Sand to my Chopin..." line is putting too much pressure on the women reading your profile (as much as I adore Frida). In my opinion online dating (and dating in general) is best done from a casual approach, try not to wax lyrical too much about where things might lead and just go with the flow. There's no guarantee you'll find your "muse" here. I think you just need to take a more relaxed approach overall.

Also, I would get rid of this line. " I am slender like a runner, but don't let that fool you, I can go for hours all night...er, I mean day, or both?" I know it's meant to be a joke, but it doesn't read well and I think at this stage it would be best to avoid references to sex altogether.

I was worried about that double entendre joke. A WP poster suggested it, and I thought it was pretty funny, but it seems it could give the wrong impression.

This is also why I have trouble describing myself. I mean, I think I am funny, but I fear making a bad or inappropriate joke, and so I prefer in public to be serious and not to joke too often.

I fear if I'm honest about who I am..that I'm a shy introvert, who is quiet and likes to work from home on weekends, and hates crowds, no one will want me or find me worthy. I know I'm damaged goods. But if I put up a good front, if I can just convince someone to go on a date with me, maybe they'll be willing to look past all my flaws, and see me for what I really am: someone capable of love, deeply loyal and eager to please, and hard working. But does any of that matter without looks, charisma, and/or money?

But those people will be looking to go on a date with the man you have presented as in your profile, and not you. It's not about tricking people into dating you, and a date gained due to smoke and mirrors is only going to end badly for everyone involved. There's an art to being genuine in your profile while also not over-sharing.

Everyone has flaws, it's just a matter of finding somebody who's flaws jive with your own, and learning to embrace them (or, if your flaws are proving to be detrimental to your well-being, taking steps to fix them). Remember, plenty of introverts get dates (perhaps with a little extra effort) and maintain healthy, happy relationships.

Your looks and monetary wealth don't matter nearly as much as you seem to think, so don't worry about that (yes, it matters to some people, but those aren't the people you want to be associating yourself with). Confidence and self-respect however are paramount to a healthy relationship, but I don't think anybody can help you there except for yourself.

since when has anyone said that brian should quit trying to find love

Nobody said that, but there seemed to be a general consensus in the last few threads he posted that maybe there are deeper issues that need to be addressed before he's ready to enter the dating world. But at the end of the day if he wants to date around that's his decision to make.

FYI, I've made subsequent updates to my OKCupid page, if you want to check them out, via the link in my original posting. I really expanded some of the personality details.

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