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This is merely the beginning of the poem.

This poem is going to use the idea of sunrise and sunset, and the changes during a day of light fading to describe the change from joy when I was in my previous relationship, to sadness, to utter despair, of my ex girlfriend having left me.

Sunrise…

The dawning of a new day, the giver of life…

How triumphant, how magnificent… she is the picture of unblemished immortality… my soul sings to her in boundless awe, humbly I am grateful…
I marvel at her immaculate beauty; a playful smile shines freely… warmly… tenderly.
She is the embodiment of absolute perfection, a celestial Art form.

Last edited by samtoo on 28 Oct 2010, 7:37 pm, edited 2 times in total.

I must say that you are very gifted, I'd like to read more of your poems.

Thank you very much, Thomas246.
Tonight, I plan to write another section.

Here is an update: -

Sunrise…
The dawning of a new day, the birth of a new life…

I am awake… at long last; I am awake, for there she shines… there, in the sky; divine perfection…
She is immaculate… magnificent… the picture of unblemished immortality… my soul sings to her in boundless awe, humbly I am grateful…
I marvel at her astounding beauty; smiling freely… warmly… tenderly… naturally.
She is the embodiment of absolute perfection, a celestial Art form.

At long last, my prayers are answered - no more delay; I can feel deep in my soul, nature’s nurturing breath invigorates me.
Sweet bliss… sweet Heavenly joy erupting exuberantly… the blossoming of flowers, sublimely beautiful… all colours… all the colours of the soul, vibrant and unstoppable… free…

I have arisen from the infinite bowels of an ominous, oppressive dank cavern... eclipsing nature… devouring light entirely… repressing my rotting conscience for what must have been an eternity; and never again will I be confined to limbo… never again.

Maybe this alone could be a poem; perhaps this doesn't have to be a bleak poem about my ex at all.
Or prose, if it doesn't fit the description of a poem.

I spent most of my poetry module last year stressing because I didn't know what a poem 'was' or how to write one...in the end my tutor said that anything can count as a poem because there's no official definition.

I really like your poem the imagery in it is amazing and you really get the atmosphere across!

Thank you very much, Bubbles137.