Today in expression class we've been given our sheets of results. The purpose of this class is to give oral presentations.
That's what the teacher had written on my sheet:
Quote:
Your presentation was generally well structured and well researched. I think it sounded a little bit like a list in parts though and would have benefited from elaborating on certain points. You prompted class discussion quite well and you were able to handle the questions you were asked too. You will improve your mark by focusing on the areas mentioned as well as exploring a subject that allows you to give personal opinions and be argumentative. Your voice was a little flat in places and came across as monotone, but I think you can remedy with practice.
My presentation was about Lord of the Flies, a book I'm fond of.
I've underlined the things I want to discuss. They are recurrent problems.
A) A list + elaborating.
Well in fact, there wasn't just ONE list, there were a few. Making list is the way I organize my knowledge. I tried to explain the purpose of each of those lists, what they revealed. I don't know how the presentation should have been done.
B) Personal opinions + argumentation.
It's really hard for me, I've never succeeded in this yet. In philosophy, I would make a catalogs of theories and thoughts and explain why they exist, and I would not choose any of them. As a result, my teacher finally said: you've got to choose. But I've never been able to.
I just feel like an observer and a describer. I don't know how to be something else. That's why I sometimes feel I'm not intelligent: I am more an encyclopeadia than someone who produces original ideas.
C) The monotonuous voice.
Assuming English is not my mother language, one could think the flat and monotonuous voice is due to my accent. But I've been told this also when I had been given speeches in French (my mother language). This happens when I give a speech, and when I read aloud.
Any advice concerning these facts?