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Asperger96
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07 Jan 2014, 10:34 am

Whatever happened to you, Father Time?
You used to let me stop to smell a rose.
But now I feel that waste would be a crime
Since time so quickly nowadays erodes

Have I done something to make you displeased?
You once gave eternity in a day
But now it seems the moment that it's seized
It's but a second till it wastes away

I know not what I've done to lose favor
Why you no longer feel it's right to give
The gift for me to enjoy and savor
This brief lifetime I am allowed to live

I only ask the next time you're in town
to visit me and let the time slow down.



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07 Jan 2014, 10:08 pm

I really liked it! It seems like a few words could use some minor tweaks to make it flow better, but it's one of the better ones I've seen here in a while!